Quote:
Originally posted by Gerbs
My timing I know it sucks
This rhymes only from luck.
Eat shit and die
I won't tell a lie
I really don't give a f**k!
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your limerick has:
7 syllables,
6 syllables,
4 syllables,
5 syllables,
7 syllables.
If you added some extra words here and there it would go a bit better:
my timing, I know it does suck.
this rhymes, but only by luck.
go eat shit and die,
I wont tell a lie,
I really just dont give a fuck.
See now you have
8 syllables,
7 syllables, (you can get away with one less because 'rhymes' is a loooong syllable)
5 syllables,
5 syllables,
8 syllables.
And this concludes this weeks lesson.
Good night!
